Tuesday 16th October, 2018
The waves crashed together and I swam to shore. I was swimming to the shore and the shark was a baby shark lost and trying to find its parents. ‘Look there is a shark coming ‘.
We all ran up this big mountain. We saw some more sharks coming. Look there is another four sharks coming Two looked old and the other two looked like the baby sharks parents. ‘Come lets go hunt for some fish to get for the shark we went to the fish shop and bought some fish. The sharks looked hungry because they were eating heaps of fishes they swam away happily
We all ran up this big mountain. We saw some more sharks coming. Look there is another four sharks coming Two looked old and the other two looked like the baby sharks parents. ‘Come lets go hunt for some fish to get for the shark we went to the fish shop and bought some fish. The sharks looked hungry because they were eating heaps of fishes they swam away happily
Hi Les, thanks for sharing your story. It is lovely how you want to feed the sharks and make sure they are happy. You have a great imagination and I was running up the mountain with you while I was reading your story. Your punctuation is pretty good too, just remember that one fish or many fish is just 'fish', not 'fishes'.
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